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A Blasphemous Villanelle for My Psychiatrist

by Kristine Briese

I beg him to forgive me and provide my daily bread.
There are no bounds to what the man can do.
His response is overpowered by the voices in my head.

This man is my salvation - did you hear what I just said?
The perfect place to take my troubles to.
I beg him to forgive me and provide my daily bread.

He knows about the voices and the roads down which they've led;
I ask him to divine which path is true.
His response is overpowered by the voices in my head.

His eyes blaze with a purity that fills my heart with dread;
He sees my sins and knows me through and through.
I beg him to forgive me and provide my daily bread.

(I get his bill and ask if I can clean his house instead;
to pay this thing my salary won't do.
His response is overpowered by the voices in my head.)

He can make wine into water and can surely raise the dead.
He parts the sea and walks on water, too.
I beg him to forgive me and provide my daily bread.
His response is overpowered by the voices in my head.


12/26/2002

Author's Note: Repost, after my traumatic mis-click.

Posted on 12/26/2002
Copyright © 2021 Kristine Briese

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by David R Spellman on 12/30/02 at 07:10 PM

Your traumatic mis-click has given me cause to read again and I am even more pleased to do so. Loved it once more --- me too! [;0)~

Posted by Don Coffman on 08/25/03 at 06:15 AM

Fascinating. I have no experience that can relate to a therapist's environment, but the poem is interesting and vivid nonetheless. I've also learned quite a bit about the villanelle. Great work, and thanks.

Posted by Michele Schottelkorb on 12/07/03 at 03:18 AM

intriguing look at lunacy and faith... i love the form and repitition you've used her... brilliant... blessings...

Posted by Maria Terezia Ferencz on 08/11/06 at 07:54 AM

Perfect in a scary way.....the really do raise the dead don't they? Even when they should be left that way.

Posted by Michelle Angelini on 12/13/06 at 05:03 AM

This is wonderful! I especially love the 5th stanza. Gave me quite a laugh. I can relate quite a bit to this.
~Chelle~

Posted by Leslie Ann Eisenberg on 12/13/06 at 06:18 AM

excellent use of this form. i especially like the last two stanzas. congrats on POTD. PK

Posted by JD Clay on 12/13/06 at 06:31 AM

This is truly a gem. Do yourself a favor and rush this right off to your publisher if you haven't already. Your skill as a writer is certainly showcased here, Kristine. Congratulation on becoming The Intuitive Poet of the Day.

Posted by Laura Doom on 06/01/07 at 06:57 PM

What impresses itself upon me here is the use of a device (the villanelle form) to emphasise the overwhelming nature of 'the voices', delivering 'blasphemy' in the sanctity of 'His' presence. I love it when poetic structures fulfil a purpose...(the unspoken 'wow' moment :)

Posted by Meghan Helmich on 11/12/07 at 04:05 PM

very nice. i have much respect for forms (and the geniuses who employ them!)

Posted by Andrea Colton on 01/30/11 at 08:50 PM

I couldn't agree more with what has already been said. I love this.

Posted by Tony Whitaker on 01/02/12 at 10:02 AM

Oh, wow! I love a good Villanelle and those "voices"! I have them too! I use to write in different styles when I first joined this site. I guess I just got lazy and write in Free Verse now, but donpt write much these days. I plays me guitar too much. A wonderful, wonderful write both humorous and introspective. You have talent and will add you to my list of favorite writers I try to catch up on when I do find the time to "come back" to my old poetic stomping grounds.

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