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All Alone

by John Harder

This place not home
So dark, so cold
All alone

Time sits still
Black of night
take me home

Nothing matters
Life so dreary
Heart of stone

Take my hand
Lead me on
where I roam

Sigh in fear
Cry a tear
No shalom

06/07/2007

Author's Note: I've attempted to put some rhythm in this one. I think it flows nicely.

Posted on 06/07/2007
Copyright © 2024 John Harder

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Dave Fitzgerald on 06/07/07 at 02:29 PM

It does flow very well.

Posted by P.T. Brooks on 06/08/07 at 10:56 PM

i think it flows as well, nice write

Posted by Michelle Angelini on 06/09/07 at 05:11 AM

It flows very well and the brevity helps. To me, it's so sad or a plea to God that the narrator wants more out of life than he/she is getting. Too many times I've said some of these same words, so this poem got me a bit emotional and I've shed some tears. Maybe this is what those of us who believe want - to be taken home.
~Chelle~

Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 08/23/07 at 07:12 PM

Snippets of life posted together make a rhythmic pattern. The poem says to me, "I don't know where I'm going, not sure where I've been. I feel lost. HELP!"

Posted by Sarah Wolf on 07/17/12 at 09:18 PM

I like this style

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