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Shattering the occlusion

by Laura Doom

It seemed so natural
for us to lie, together
under the watchful eye
of the weeping sky
as it kissed the earth;
implicit absolution
for a mundane act
of pure recreation.

As heaven and earth
you and I are inseparable.
Though we touch the ephemeral
our tears flow through eternity
soaking our flesh in luxuria
to quench nature's thirst
for sexual intoxication.
Love's illusion evaporates;
one fleeting sky in the cloud
of this heavenly hell on earth.

05/15/2004

Posted on 05/15/2004
Copyright © 2024 Laura Doom

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Michele Schottelkorb on 05/15/04 at 07:10 PM

i have to disagree... i found nothing cliché about this... and "big" words are present, but not so "big" as to suggest they are purposely placed... in fact, i think the whole tone and verbiage of the piece has ambience precisely of a coming down... i find it quite brilliant... blessings...

Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 05/15/04 at 07:25 PM

Strong, haunting piece writing Laura. Good to read your work again.

Posted by Max Bouillet on 05/18/04 at 09:05 PM

A love poem! A departure from previous themes. Your style diversity and image choice are as impeccable as ever. Tremendous verse.

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