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my first poem

by Richard Trotter

I wish I could take
a flaming sword
and tear apart the skies
then leave behind the burning city
as windows shatter in slow motion
soaring into the abyss
And beyond, I go walking
in sultry summer rain
gripping her slender hand
in our peaceful unity
her soaked hair, clinging to her face
Together, adrift in another place
the land where moonlight
animates my dreams

01/16/2004

Author's Note: this was the first poem I wrote. it was previously posted as "untitled" when I was a member before.

Posted on 01/16/2004
Copyright © 2020 Richard Trotter

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Leandra K Brossard on 01/17/04 at 05:32 AM

The energy in this piece is amazing.. it's like a dozen powerful emotions all rolled into a very concise and equally powerful poem.. I say it's a Great first work.. ;)

Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 01/18/04 at 05:09 AM

Pretty good for a first poem Richard. I in fact see two separate poems here.

Posted by Kalikala Smith on 01/20/04 at 12:43 AM

wow, i love this.... the imagery is great! i'm ashamed now to share my first poem;)

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