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Awake

by Katerina T Nix

Yesterday Jared asked me: If the sunset were a shade of purple, and you had to describe the sunset without using the color purple, or any object purple, or using the colors red and blue and saying they mix to make purple, how would you describe this particular sunset?
Well here is my answer, it is a draft. Comments are not only welcome, but also needed. Enjoy. love Kat xoxo





I am awake.

My heart pulses,
A raging throb beside the hills of lungs
Inside me.

Liquid shooting out through arteries
Illuminating my body in much
The same fashion as a strobe light.

The liquid returns to my internal satellite
Dead, through veins the colour of my lover’s eyes

I flicker.
Grow tired and quiet.

My highways of muscle
Ache with the slowing of my heart’s glorious rays

Slower my heartsun pulses.
I lay myself down and
My heart reaches its dusk.

I sleep.

12/06/2006

Author's Note: .... My lover's eyes aren't really blue, they're hazel. But it worked for this piece, so today they are blue :)

Posted on 12/05/2006
Copyright © 2022 Katerina T Nix

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Chris Sorrenti on 12/06/06 at 12:58 AM

Captivating descriptiveness of internal organs. I especially like the second stanza (heart/lungs) and the use of the words "internal satellite."

Posted by Jared Fladeland on 12/06/06 at 04:10 AM

i like my response better. ha. jk. good job. you took it somewhere i didn't expect. you win

Posted by Quentin S Clingerman on 12/06/06 at 09:48 PM

Unique description of a sunset definitely! Vibrant description. Unusual analogy.

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