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Tectonic Plates

by Stephanie Lane Sutton

Are we platonic
or are we just tectonic plates—
always rubbing each other the wrong way
when we try to move closer,
opening and reopening canyons
big enough and fast enough to swallow whole houses.

Do I
slip up and over you,
instead of letting the soft folds fold over each other,
wet and content? Can we only
widen the oceans,
spread out the coast,
organize continents so lonely and so young.
Have we only just emerged
from the molten magnum rock
to find the only thing keeping us suspended
is our own disbelief?

Do we move the earth when we touch?

Sometimes I mistake the sound of your heartbeat
for the sound of a tidal wave turning over the land
moments away from turning me over, too.
Sometimes when I hear the sound of your breathing
I mistake it for the sound of water rushing around my head.
I can feel my arms, legs, spine being pulled in contradictory ways.

Sometimes when you are silent
I think I hear thunder.

I know what it’s like in inner space,
the parts of the earth so hidden we deem them unfit for life,
where all the creatures are just creatures that never should have been.
I know every time I move to touch you
I could be swallowed by a bottomless pit,
or spat back out on the surface, alone.
I’ll blame it all on the magnetic pull—
opposites collide and abide no laws.

09/20/2009

Posted on 09/20/2009
Copyright © 2010 Stephanie Lane Sutton

Member Comments on this Poem
Posted by Joe Cramer on 09/20/09 at 05:29 PM

... wonderful......

Posted by Shannon McEwen on 09/20/09 at 07:56 PM

I really like this, it reminds me of my current relationship with my husband, we love each other immensely, but many times it seems we don't meet. This expresses it perfectly

Posted by Joe David on 09/20/09 at 08:31 PM

I love it. Right away the play on platonic and tectonic. The beautiful nature imagery mimicking the ebb and flow of a couple relationship. Very well done.

Posted by Alison McKenzie on 09/24/09 at 10:36 PM

The one thing I REALLY like about this piece is how you never specifically mention the rigidness of the plates and how that might specifically hamper their relationships, one to another. A couple of things I wouldn't do if it was my poem...(and, of course, large grains of salt are available upon request :-) I wouldn't say "soft folds fold" - the repetition there sort of distracted me momentarily from the flow. Also, I think I would have avoided the near-cliche use of "suspended disbelief", or I would have tweeked the cliche just a bit more so that the reader has to stretch to see the cliche in it. Again, feel free to head toward to bowl of that salt...Oh, and just one more thing - I would have LOVED to see the theme of tectonic plates carried throughout instead of switching to water and weather in the middle, OR, I would have picked a different title.

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