So, there is a lot of rich imagery here, just bursting out (of you) and out of the dull overcast beach town from morning to night... I read this many times now, and each time more clarification, like the sunshining through or a wave hitting the shore. It's got fantastic atmosphere even though you could not get a tan, and your giving up till June here, your indoor "exercise" will get you through, and the nightmoonstars will find you. My favorite constructions (such a woderful part of this work, and so in the spirit of Joyce, especially considering the seashore theme, but at the same time so individually voiced ... "cliffmight cry" "greensseafoams" "beachmosphere" (nice invention!)"starsout swingingagainst" "cloudsbynow" "sexy thinglocation" "allthethings" "aquasheets of saltwaves." Yes.

"until thejune i will put on my fifteenpounds of muscle and flexthruthis. pretty, theoutside, thiscity,a valentinodress on an uglygirl." This stanza is absolute perfection! I'm jealous. I should've thought this one up. Haha. Oh oh oh! How much do I love this?! But you knew that already. I swear to god, this entire poem has been describing my city. And I adore the words you've meshed together as one. Because it takes a second. For me, anyway. Like, I have to go back and read it a second time because my eyes see it but my mind doesn't quite regester each meshword. You know? It's pretty spectacular. I love this. Great work! (I'm adding this to my favorites.)

there is no way to generate a response worthy of your work, you almost defy review or commentary, i read through this beautiful piece several times, each time it became more powerful and whatever i was going to write here in this space became less meaningful. your work is a rare treasure, to be unearthed by those who so desperately seek it, beyond that you compel your reader to rethink their entire approach. you have discovered a way to re-mix, re-edit and re-master the use of language in a way that does not come off as a trendy, dated hit but rather you emerge yourself in it so deeply that it feels more like a masterpiece; a beautifully articulate symphony so aware of itself and the rules that it knows how to break every preconceived restriction in order to produce an honest and true experience for reader and writer alike. may i be shot dead in the town square tonight if i have exaggerated any of this. you are truly talented and bare a uniqueness so unlike anyone i have ever read. outlaw, thank you for sharing this. keep up the good work.